Senin, 25 Mei 2009

UNFORGETTABLE MOMENT
MISUNDERSTANDING

Five years ago,when I was fourteen years.At the moment Mr.Maksum ( Qira'ati teacher ), reading patched by announcement in the small mosque announcement board .And the announcement about Qira'ati contest one regency qira'ati that will performed one week after the announcement of posted.And the reality my teacher asked I was represent small mosque to followed it.With like fell and fear I accepted offered my teacher.

After listened greeting from Gresik Regent,the participant passed in to take serial number.And i was get serial number 15.After awaited some a long time,about one hours.Number 15 is called. With nervously I go up in stage. Fifteen also minutes had overcomes.And finally I had finished Qira'Ati him.After that,I was go down from stage with free feeling.And now I was just awaited announcement a champion from the contest.


After two hour await,grand jury calculation score it,after finished at four evening.And also my opinion .And my heart beat faster.Mr.Abdi announced one by one a champion started from champion three.The champion three and champion two non name of me is called.But at announcement of first champion,Mr.Abdi mention the name of same with me.With spontaneity and feel confidenced I was go forward to the front and directed climb stage.


But at the same time there is a woman joined in to go forward to the front also.But I thought him only champion second new go up to stage.And after all its champion gather on the stage,Mr.Abdi its seen confused.Then for the determined,Mr.Abdi directed mentioned the participant number.And in the reality participant number that I had not been mentioned by Mr.Abdi.For a moment I was very ashamed. With slowly and disappointed ,I go down from stage.And everybody in there laugh at me.After that Mr.Abdi invite regent to submitted gift it. And the gift in the form of a cup, money, and certificate.Be equal to with it,Mr.Abdi read for complete name the won one by one according to champion story..Not only the complete name, participant number is called too.
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10 komentar:

  1. aisyah25 Mei 2009 pukul 23.51

    I think your paragraph is good...

    but you can edit
    "Five year ago"
    with "Five years ago"

    And you can edit subject with capital word..

    BalasHapus
  2. Yulia Primita Sari26 Mei 2009 pukul 02.13

    Hi ria...........

    - I think your paragraph is good enough.

    - About your grammar, you have some mistakes in your paragraph.
    ( you still used to some simple present in your paragraph,but you have to change in simple past because your experience in the past)

    -you still used to some words (conjunction)is wrong.


    By : Yulia Primita Sari
    120810494G

    BalasHapus
  3. Karina26 Mei 2009 pukul 03.31

    Ria....

    i think your paragraph is good enough,,,but be carefull with your writing,,,there are some mistakes with your tenses,grammar and vocab......

    I understand with your sentences,,but a little bit confusing.....

    but,,so far you do the best in here.....

    that's all my comment,,

    thank's...:)

    BalasHapus
  4. cHuBbY_LuChUu26 Mei 2009 pukul 04.45

    your writing is order,..

    and I think is good enough,..

    elok 120810486G

    BalasHapus
  5. Rulyana26 Mei 2009 pukul 05.16

    Hey,

    Ur writing is no title..
    U should give a title on ur writing

    And I think there are still some mistakes, u forget to check ur gramatical..
    such as:
    -when my age still that fourteen years -> When I was fourteen years, and etc

    U forget to use past tense..

    Well, but it's ok, I hope ur next writing is better..

    by: 120810493 G

    BalasHapus
  6. Febrina a.k.a Berroy26 Mei 2009 pukul 06.36

    hii ria ..

    actually your paragraph is good enough ..

    but i think you didn't use simple past to write your paragraph , because your paragraph happened in the past ..

    that's all ..

    BalasHapus
  7. nadhira26 Mei 2009 pukul 06.43

    i think your paragraphs are good enough.

    but you have many mistakes especially in grammar, you should use past tense not present tense.

    beside that your writing not too focus and so wide, such as you shouldn't mention the name of master of ceremony.

    but it's ok, you can do better in the next project.

    BalasHapus
  8. Heri Purwanto26 Mei 2009 pukul 07.05

    Hello.......Good friend

    Ok...your friend gave many comments about your task. And I think Your Paragraphs are good but There are mistakes. Please improve and keep your spirit.

    yeah... Just that all my comments and see U again.

    BalasHapus
  9. amazIng Write26 Mei 2009 pukul 08.06

    Hello
    Im Sory me scarer coment in your BLog
    because i am opportunity Confused make coment in blog.


    i think Your Writing is very draw,,,,,, and tighten
    ...and please check your gramer...ukai,,,,,,,
    Thanks...RUDINAL 120810491G

    BalasHapus
  10. ria anggraini26 Mei 2009 pukul 11.29

    OK THANKS with the your comment..
    And i will do better next project....

    BalasHapus

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