Jumat, 10 April 2009



SECOND DRAFT


BROMO MOUNTAIN


Bromo Mountain is one of famous tourism object in east java. It is still Active Mountain until now. As a tourism object, Mount Bromo becomes to draw because its status as mount has fire to which still active. Bromo has 2.392 meters height above that sea level stay in four regions, namely Sub-Province Probolinggo, Pasuruan, Lumajang, and Malang city.


Mount Bromo have a cauldron with diameter ± 800 meters (north-south) and ± 600 meters (east-west). While its danger area in the form of circle with radius 4 km from Bromo. Ocean sand cauldron center is tourism pledge from Mount Bromo, in cold mountain nature, we earn to see wide of grassy field and desert. While most awaited from Mount Bromo is when sunrise and sun set because it is true will be crystal clear looked to be and very beautiful. Although journey to Bromo very dusty, but lost to, because beauty of which is served by really extraordinary.

Seller food and beverage in sand ocean area usually have opened before at 3am, so that you have stood by ready for doing/conducting climb pass doorstep child culminate that famous bromo. Enjoy view until 9 am and you also can return to reach your departure town about 12 am. And if you being lost don't panic and continue journey ( more than anything else in the middle of thick fog ), await because usually start at 2 am – 3 am some rental horseman pass by quickly sand ocean area.
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13 komentar:

  1. Febrina a.k.a Berroy12 April 2009 pukul 03.38

    i think your paragraph is good enough ..
    you describe this place very clear with size about the mountain , and interesting place in there.
    but i have suggestion for you..
    in the first paragraph you should tell about culture in there like Ceremony of kasada,by the reason many people will interested to go there.
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  2. Yulia Primita Sari12 April 2009 pukul 19.19

    By: Yulia Primita Sari
    120810494G

    - I think your topic sentence is good enough.

    _ Your describe is very detail.

    - about your grammar, there is little mistake, about use punctuation mark and conjunction less exact.

    BalasHapus
  3. nadhira12 April 2009 pukul 19.41

    i think your paragraph is good enough, but i see some mistakes. no space in several words such as horsesteep, and other words.
    but so far is good.

    BalasHapus
  4. aisyah13 April 2009 pukul 02.29

    I THINK YOUR PARAGRAPH IS GOOD AND GREAT

    YOU TELL AND DESCRIBE ABOUT BROMO MOUNTAIN WITH CLEARLY AND VERY DETAIL....

    BalasHapus
  5. Rulyana13 April 2009 pukul 02.59

    Hmmm,,,

    That's good I think..


    You described and explained about Mount Bromo clearly,,

    After I read Your writing, I want to go to Mount Bromo Someday,,Because It sounds interesting.

    So far your writing is good, but there are still some mistakes, for example you didnt use the correct punctuation mark.
    But, it's Ok..


    Commented by: Rulyana (120810493 G)

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  6. Karina13 April 2009 pukul 05.13

    Your writing is interesting,,,even there some mistakes,,but so far your writing is good enough...

    you had explained a lot about bromo mountain,,,everyone who read will interest about it and want to visit there..


    give my blog comment!
    :)
    by:Karina.R

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  7. Kurnia Suci13 April 2009 pukul 05.46

    i think your pragraph is good enough
    and you describe is very interestinng about that
    honestly i want to go there coz i've never visited it
    i think after everyone read your writing, they interest about that

    BalasHapus
  8. Pratiwi Ramandita13 April 2009 pukul 07.21

    Hi.. Ria..
    Your paragraph is so interested for me.
    But you should do more practice with your grammar.

    You describe bromo mountain so clearly. And You can make me interested to visit that place.

    Just that.. don't forget to give me comment..

    Commented by : Pratiwi Ramandita 120810487G

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  9. NAHDIYAH13 April 2009 pukul 23.26

    your paragraph good enough, but it will be more interest if u describe n explain about the interesting place not only write.


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  10. Heri Purwanto14 April 2009 pukul 10.27

    Ahaaa.........
    For this topic, you describe about Bromo Mountain. How many did you go there?
    Yeach.... I think Your describe is good. And What's different between Bromo mountain and Bromo Mount ?

    I think That all my comment and see U again.
    By Hery Purwanto (120810484G)

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  11. Rico20 April 2009 pukul 04.18

    i like your paragaraph because you describe that so clearly. .

    and what the meaning of " unlucky sub-province" ????????


    commented by : Rico ( 120810490 G )

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  12. cHuBbY_LuChUu21 April 2009 pukul 00.35

    I like your writing...

    you can describe more specific about bromo mountain,.

    commented by : elok (120810486G)

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  13. Damasti21 April 2009 pukul 03.15

    your paragraph is quite good.
    but i find a mistake in your last paragraph.

    > seller food and beverage ...
    it should be:
    > food and beverage seller ...

    so far it's great

    by 120810185g

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